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Deleted Scene: The Original Opening

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By Aprilynne Pike - Posted on 08 July 2009

So I've been promising to post this for a while: the scene where Wings originally started. It may constitute a very minor spoiler if you haven't read the book, but as this was the original beginning you're probably okay.

Honestly, I had a hard time letting go of this beginning. I enjoyed jumping right into something strange and mysterious! I mulled it over for a long time. (Like WEEKS, seriously!) But in the end, I decided that my editor was right to cut it.

The pulse thing did not come back into play until about a third of the way through the book, so it was like this pink elephant in the room. It also made the first fifty pages feel like a bit of a letdown because there was a Big Surprise!! and then things settled down and were normal for a long time. With the beginning I have now, there is a very realistic introduction to Laurel, and the weirdness builds gradually.

But thanks to the magic of the internet, you get to see some of the changes that take place after the book is written.



"Hustle, hustle!"

Laurel bounded off the track, breathless from the mile run. She'd never particularly liked running--or sports of any kind for that matter--but a fitness test was standard procedure for all students on the first day of gym class at Del Norte High School.

"Come on over! Hurry, you got two minutes before we need everyone to take their pulse." The stocky female gym coach was waving the class over with a clipboard. "Okay, you can get your pulse from your wrist, but sometimes it's hard to find it there the first time. That's fine, two fingers to the side of your neck and you should feel a good, strong pulse, especially after that run. If you're still having problems you can check your pulse in your groin like this." Several people giggled as Mrs. Wilson stuck her fingers between her legs to demonstrate. "Now, find your pulse and when I say go, start counting. When I say stop, stop."

Laurel's fingers went to her wrist, but she didn't feel anything except the warmth of her skin from the sun. Her eyes darted around and she was relieved to see that several of her classmates had already moved on to their necks. She placed her fingers on the right side of her throat the way the coach had demonstrated and pressed gently. Then a little harder. She changed over to the left side and still felt nothing. Most of the kids around her were standing quietly with their fingers pressed to their necks. She tried to mimic their position but still couldn't find anything that felt like the beating drum Mrs. Wilson had described. She considered trying the groin pulse, but only for a second.

She started to remove her fingers so she could raise her hand when Mrs. Wilson blew her whistle and yelled, "Okay, get ready!" Laurel jammed her fingers back into her throat and tried to act like she was feeling something.

"Three, two, one, count."

Laurel kept her eyes on the ground as she pretended to count. She glanced around the group and watched the other kids from under her lashes. Several had their eyes closed and a few were mouthing numbers as they concentrated.

"Stop!" Fingers left throats and wrists and the whole class seemed to start breathing again as one. Mrs. Wilson circled the group asking for numbers. Everyone had an answer: ninety-four, one hundred and three, ninety-seven, eighty-two. Laurel listened carefully as her classmates rattled off numbers. Then the clipboard was under her nose.


"Laurel Sewell."


Laurel hesitated for only a moment. "Ninety."

Mrs. Wilson did not even glance at her. "Ninety," she repeated, then stopped.

Laurel sucked in a breath when Mrs. Wilson's eyebrows furrowed. "Sewell... Jacob Sewell's daughter?"

Laurel shook her head. "Mark Sewell's. We just moved here."

Mrs. Wilson made a small grunt of acknowledgment and moved on. "Name?" she asked the next student.

Laurel released the breath she'd been holding and attempted to wander off toward the locker room as casually as the other girls.

No one stopped her or called out that she had cheated and when the gym doors closed behind her, she felt safe. But as soon as she walked into the locker room she closed herself into a bathroom stall and tried again. Her wrist, her throat, and now that she was in the privacy of her own stall, her groin. Nothing. Maybe there was something wrong with her fingers.

Or maybe lots of people had cheated.

It didn’t matter. No one knew.

She left the stall and hurried to her small locker, anxious to be back in her lightweight tank top and jean shorts. She hated sweats and the cheap gym t-shirts were heavy and stiff. It was a relief to stand in her bra and underwear for a few seconds and let the air cool the light sheen of sweat on her forehead and back. But the other girls, who were all dressing carefully with their backs to the group, eyed her as she stood so unclothed, so she yanked her clothes on, slipped into her flip-flops, and hurried out the door.

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